Lesson #1 in Obscurity

The room was prismatic,
a kaleidoscope of color
carefully planned and manipulated.
The varied hues melted
and were absorbed into one:
the blinding white that slowly
crept further and further along,
drawing everything, everyone into
the incandescent erasure.
All was forgotten, all breath held
as delicacy and determination blended.
No tears or smiles were ever as significant
as these mutual expressions of joy.
Past and future touched hands
in a regal, veiled promenade.

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4 thoughts on “Lesson #1 in Obscurity

  1. Well done.

    Hmmm . . . I am trying to find the participants in the the mutuality you mentioned. Best I can see are the various colors combining into pure white light. I suppose that’s a sort of mutuality there.

    Did you think of writing this in present tense? I might work well that way. So “Past and future touch hands” . . . would sort of give a better sense of timelessness.

    So what inspired this?

  2. Yeah, there are a few things I want to change around. This was the product of a 15 minute writing exercise my cousin and I challenged each other with the other night, so it was hastily thrown together. 🙂

    And a hint as to the topic: It’s a description of a certain point in a wedding ceremony.

  3. I liked this one, too, Kara…especially using tears and smiles as mutual expressions of joy. I also enjoyed the phrase about everyone being drawn into the procession. Very nice.

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